No More Misses Nice Writer

Not long ago, I wrote a post about Writers and Censorship.

One of my short stories had been accepted by a magazine for school kids, which had me doing cartwheels and bouncing off the walls. But then the editor wanted some changes, and they weren’t just minor.

“Welcome to the world of professional writing,” one of my writing colleagues told me. She qualified this by saying that censorship in the education market is particularly rife. In fact, the do’s and don’ts are so numerous, that a lot of writers stay away from this field.

Now I know why.

As I mentioned in my last post, I adhered to the first request to “water down” my story. I made a couple of changes, removing the “violence” (the normal argy bargy between brothers and sisters), and made my burglar get caught by the police. I wasn’t too upset by the changes – the tone hadn’t altered at all, and the story was still funny.

But if I thought that would be the end of it, I was very wrong.

A follow-up request arrived from the magazine editor. This time, the list of changes and the attitudes that backed up the need for the changes staggered me.

I wasn’t allowed to let the brother call his sister by a name he’d made up as, heaven help us, what parent in their right mind would allow such a thing! (Note to reader: niether parent appears in the story.) They were still unhappy about the brother’s treatment of his sister, but weren’t at all concerned that the sister was a pretty rough character and gave as good as she got. Oh, and my gripping opening had to be changed completely: goodness me, you couldn’t expose children to a brother giving his sister’s doll a haircut, now could you?

I sat back and had a good long hard think about what I was being asked to do – after I’d ranted and raved at the computer screen. If I went ahead with the requested alterations, my story would lose so much. It wouldn’t be funny anymore, there’d be no engaging interaction between brother and sister, and the tone would be lost. In fact, there would be no story.

I imagined any kid sitting and reading my story in the magazine. What would he or she say at the end of it? “Boring…”

And how would I feel about my name being printed on such a boring story?

That was it, the answer. I replied to the editor, explaining how ridiculous these changes were – in a very nice way, of course.

The result is that the story has been withdrawn.

Immediately, I felt enormous relief. As a writer, I like to write gripping and interesting stories for kids. I want to find a different angle, something that stands out. And I want to show real life situations, like brothers and sisters arguing with one another.

This experience has made me wiser. Perhaps writing fiction for the education market isn’t for me.



How to Get Those Ideas Flowing for Your Stories

One of the main questions writers and authors are asked is: “Where do you get your ideas from?”.

The hope is that there will be some sort of magical answer. “All you have to do is a series of ten push-ups before you go to sleep at night, and whammo, the ideas just flow!”.

Maybe this isn’t such a silly thing to say. Have you ever considered the role of exercise in sucking those ideas from the sludge in your brain?

I came across a post by Jim about Running and Writing
And suddenly, I was taken back to my running days. With a pang, I realised that since I had stopped running – because of a troublesome knee – my ideas for stories had returned to the sludge in my brain.

Now you’d think that any sort of exercise would help with creativity. Increasing blood flow, releasing endorphines – isnt that enough to get the fingers pounding on the keyboard?

Not from where I stand. When I had to give up running, of course I went back to cycling. I just can’t be a sloth anymore – that was in my former life. But cycling doesn’t seem to have the same effect on my creativity as running did.

My theory for this is that your heart rate during a running session is fairly high – about eighty-five percent of your max. But in cycling, unless you’re really pushing it, your heart rate barely gets above seventy percent of your max.

Since reading Jim’s post, I feel on the verge of a big decision. Having just done a huge ride at a major event in Melbourne called “Around the Bay in A Day” where I rode 220kms in one day, my cycling career has fizzled out. Shock, horror, this isn’t me! What’s going on? Am I really going to fall into the slothful state that I detest?

Somehow I don’t think so. I actually got on my bike this morning for the first time in three weeks, and felt good.

But it’s not enough. I want the ideas! So maybe I’ll try the running again, but at a slower pace, and maybe less often. Just enough to get those stubborn ideas out of the sludge. I need those ideas, and I need them now!



Writers and Censorship

I’ve often read with interest how writers deal with their work being censored by editors. I’m talking about the small scale stuff here, where the editor doesn’t like the language used, or feels the story has too much inference to delinquent behaviour, drink and drugs and the like.

And, of course, I’m talking about stories and books written for kids.

From what I’ve read, writers have different reactions and approaches to censorship. Some fight to retain every word, preferring to withdraw their work than change it. Others acquiesce, not wanting to ruin any future relationships with that publisher or editor. I suppose it comes down to a few things, like whether or not you’re already published and can pick and choose, how strongly you feel about changing your story, and how desperate you are to get your name in print.

I think I fall into the desperate category!

I just heard from an editor in the education market who had accepted one of my short stories a few months ago. It has now been re-read by a committee of millions, by the sound of it, and they have some concerns. Could I either address these, or would I like them to do it?

I shouldn’t have been shocked by the elements that gave rise to concern, as I’ve heard other writers mention similar things that have raised eyebrows in the education market. But still, it did amaze me.

Firstly, they were worried about the “violence” between my brother and sister character and how disingenuous the brother is towards his little sister. My characters have a bit of a rough and tumble, instigated by the sister, and the brother insinuates that he’d rather not have a sister. Now that’s pretty normal stuff, I’d reckon. Siblings fight, right? Kids wouldn’t be shocked by that, would they? How many siblings get on really well when they’re young?

My story is a humourous one, where this brother is so naive that he helps a burglar nick stuff from the family home. Now that’s a big concern for the publisher. It’s not right that the burglar wins. So I have to rewrite the ending so that the family don’t lose out.

Maybe I’m naive. After all, look at the Brady Bunch. Weren’t they all lovey-dovey? Nothing bad happened to them, did it?

So what am I doing? Well, the rewrites, of course. After all, they’ve paid me, and I don’t want to give the money back. And I want the work to be my own, not a composite of their words and mine.

When I’m a well-published writer, I’ll fight for my characters and my ideas. But right now, I just want to get my foot in the door and keep it there.

Back to the keyboard. My burglar is about to come to a sticky end. Ooops, that would be violent, wouldn’t it?



Out of the Mouths of Babes

As a writer for children, I’m always listening to what kids say, absorbing everything about them, their mannerisms, personalities, peculiar quirks.

And as a speaker, I love addressing school groups, especially primary school kids, because they give so much and can produce pearls of wisdom.

One of my friends in my writing network sent an email that touched my heart. She had collected a list of quotes from four to eight year olds about the meaning of love. This is what Billy, a four year old, said about love:

‘When someone loves you, the way they say your name is different. You just know that your name is safe in their mouth.’



Another Angle on What Editors Really Want

An editor won’t even get past page one of your manuscript if there’s no gripping hook, the writing is dull and peppered with adverbs and adjectives, and if the main character’s personality doesn’t instantly leap off the page.

Despite what I wrote in my recent post Catching The Editor’s Eye where I broke some rules and yet got a promise of being published, I still stuck solidly to what really matters when writing a story: having a main character who the reader can relate to; and using hooks, snappy language and dialogue and action to move the story along, ie the show don’t tell rule.

But sometimes – or is it often – sloppy writing gets published and sells millions of books. The question is why?

I belong to a network of authors – most of whom write for kids – and we regularly exchange thoughts and advice via email. One of the group commented on ‘The Shadow Thief’, written by 14-year-old Alexandra Adornetto.

Apparently, ‘The Shadow Thief’ is an exciting tale, but has three glaring writer no no’s that would have an editor chucking it into the reject pile very quickly. They are:

  • an omniscient author who talks to the reader inbetween scenes;
  • heaps of adverbs, especially the ones ending in ‘ly that if the rest of us mere authors dare to pen would result in an electric shock; and
  • plenty of tell, not show.

The belief of this group member is that Alexandra got published because of her age. Being only 14 years old is a fantastic selling point. We all know that one of the considerations publishers take into account when assessing manuscripts is the saleability of a book.

It is depressing that this can happen, and we’re fully aware that it does. As my colleague said, if ‘The Shadow Thief’ was written by a 40-year-old housewife, would it have been published?

But I’ll stick to the rules I follow, because I know how turned off I get when I read badly written novels. I’d rather attract discerning readers than sell millions.



My Top Three Websites for Writers

Writing is a solitary and lonely career. It’s up to you to find the ideas for a story, compose your draft, edit, edit, edit, then polish, polish, polish. Then you can ask someone to read it for you, give you some feedback. But up until then, you’re mostly on your own.

So we as writers, in our attempts to find inspiration and support, can spend hours and hours at our computers reading ezines on writing, researching sites on how-to’s, and downloading eBooks on unlocking the secret to getting published. In doing so, we don’t actually write, because we’re too busy reading and studying.

I’ve been down this track and wasted oodles of time. But now I’m much wiser. I’ve culled the number of ezines I subscribe to, and stick to the websites that give me the information I need. Why search for more when you’ve already found it? Yes, it’s a great way of avoiding the dreaded blank screen with an expectantly blinking cursor, waiting for your first eye-catching sentence.

Where Do I Go For Writing Tips and Useful Advice?

I’ve narrowed my websites down to the following. Have a look and see what you think. They’re not all just for childrens’ writers, as you’ll see.

writing4success.com This is one of Marg McAlister’s sites on writing in general. What I love about Marg’s site is that she has many tipsheets on all aspects of writing that are easy to digest. Her explanations of techniques are always accompanied by examples of “good” and “bad” writing. This makes it so much easier to understand concepts such as “show, don’t tell” and point of view slips. Marg offers these tipsheets in free downloadable eBooks.

Jill McDougall is a wonderful children’s author. You’ll see straight away from her site that she knows how to write for kids. Her language is snappy, full of life (you can almost see her bouncing around), and captivating. What Jill has taught me is to perk up your writing. Don’t be boring. She has a great eBook on how to write for kids, which is one of the best ones I’ve come across.

Sally Odgers is another prolific children’s author. She offers a very affordable manuscript assessment service that is invaluable to all childrens’ writers. Her response time is amazingly quick, the cost incredibly cheap and her feedback so helpful. Because she is Australian, she is well aware of the market here, which is helpful when it comes to approaching publishers. She also knows the US and the UK markets, and where your story might fit.

How Could I Forget?

I mentioned ezines, so I can’t leave out the one I find the most useful. There are heaps, but this one gives me what I need.

Pass It On is Jackie Hosking’s weekly ezine for childrens’ writers. It includes general industry and publishing news, competitions and markets, great articles and a chance for writers to ask questions of the group. It’s not too long, so I don’t spend hours reading it, but I always get something out of it.

So there you go, my top sites and ezine. Now, back to the writing!



Catching the Editor’s Eye

How to catch an editor’s eye is something writers battle with constantly. The many likes and dislikes that editors reveal in an attempt to lower their slush piles are pounced on by those desperate to get published, and followed to the letter. Things like:

  • Watch out for typos and spelling errors;
  • Always stick to the submissions guidelines on the publisher’s website;
  • Study the publisher’s catalogue before submitting your work to make sure it fits; and
  • Polish your work thoroughly before sending it, or suffer the consequences!

On top of all this, writers know how vital it is to have a strong plot, show not tell, use appropriate dialogue, and have believable characters.

This last point – make sure your characters are believable – is something my writing teacher has drummed into me. And I understand why. I don’t like reading a book where the character seems false, or does something unpredictable because it is convenient for the author, not because the character would have done it. So I usually don’t stray far from this critical writing skill.

Except…except when it might mean I sell a story to a magazine.

A while back, I came up with a cheeky idea for a story which involved a ten-year-old kid unwittingly helping a burglar steal items from his home. Once I’d done the draft, I sent it to my writing teacher for feedback. She immediately sent it back with heaps of comments such as, “this would never happen”, and “this isn’t believable” etc. Now I was offended, because I really liked the story and the character I’d created. It was a funny story and I thought it would appeal to kids.

So I followed my gut and continued working on the story. One thing that kept me going was occasional comments I’d come across in writers’ newsletters from authors about the best way to catch an editor’s eye. Suggestions ranged from sending stories that didn’t quite fit their guidelines, but were close enough, to giving them the more quirky stories.

My interest is to write for children, and the school magazines are a great media in which to get work published, yet very difficult to break into when you’re new. I bundled up three of my short stories and sent them off to one of the school mags, just to test the waters. One was a story about bullying, another was a mystery story, and the third was my humourous non-believable story. Lo and behold, last week a letter arrived from the school mag informing me they had accepted my non-believable piece!

So I’ve learned something very important. When trying to break into the market, as well as finding ideas and stories that kids want to read, you need to be inventive, approach an old theme from a different angle. Editors like originality and a fresh voice. Sometimes, being a bit different pays off, as it has for me.

Try it yourself and see if it makes a difference. It can’t hurt.



More Inspiration from a Famous Author

Following on from my last post, I saw a quote by Jodi Piccoult about the task of writing. It comes from an article in the Sydney Morning Herald on July 21st.

Jodi has written many books, and I consider her to be a good writer. ‘My Sister’s Keeper’ is one that stands out in my mind.

The quote reads:

‘Writing is total grunt work. A lot of people think it’s all about sitting and waiting for the muse. I don’t buy that. It’s a job. There are days when I
really want to write, days when I don’t. Every day I sit down and write. You can always edit something bad. You can’t edit something blank.’

How true is that! Yesterday, I was procrastinating about writing a particular sscene in my young adult novel. I forced myself to sit at the computer and at least have a go at it. The result was that it flowed really nicely. But I wouldn’t have minded if I’d written rubbish, because I knew that editing it would be far easier than trying to create it in the first place.

It’s words of wisdom like these from Jodi that help us keep pen to paper, or fingers to keyboard.



Writing Inspiration

Last night, I saw an interview with Thomas Keneally on a TV program. Keneally has published over forty books and has been writing for about fifty years.

Often, when I listen to novelists speak, I feel discouraged and depressed. It seems impossible to ever reach the level they have achieved. But Keneally was different. He said a couple of things that hit home for me.

Firstly, he said: “write first, get it right later”. He reinforced what I’ve heard before and what I should know, that you need to get your story down, do the editing later. Don’t let that critic in to stop your flow of thoughts and ideas. But it’s hard to stick to this. When I heard this, I suddenly realised I had stopped writing my young adult novel, because the critic had taken control. For weeks, I’d been on Chapter 14 and not budged. Prior to that, I was writing one chapter a week! So I put my head down, fingers to the keys, and got back to the writing. And now it’s flowing beautifully.

The second thing he said made me smile. He said that as writers, we’re made up of fifty percent uncertainty and fifty percent artistic arrogance. The arrogance is about us thinking that the world needs and wants to read our books. Both are so true. I swing from feeling self-doubt and uncertainty about my stories, to being incensed that my work doesn’t always get published. It’s an interesting mix.

So I sally forth, feeling a bit less isolated in my writing career, determined to keep going. One bit of feedback I got from a manuscript assessor for my junior fiction novel, “Seeing Dogs” was so uplifting, that I feel driven to get it published, no matter what. Sally Odgers, a multi-published children’s author, read “Seeing Dogs” and told me there was nothing wrong with it. The problem in getting it published is with it not fitting the market. I’ve got some choices about how to remedy this, one being self-publishing, the other being condensing it into a picture book. I’m considering both, but still searching for that elusive publisher.

The other bit of encouragement that is keeping me motivated and my fingers on the keyboard is an acceptance of a couple of my pieces by Harcourt, the educational publisher with whom I’m now aligned. They’re non-fiction pieces for a year six literacy unit, but it’s a foot in the door. I love this type of work: it’s challenging, exciting, and a new learning curve in terms of knowing how to write for the education market.

So I’m going to practise what Thomas Keneally preaches: write first, get it right later.



Transforming the Loopy Labrador into a Placid Guide Dog

When I observe the way my labrador behaves when she’s off harness, and when I recall the many stories of her “mad” behaviour from her puppy raisers, I wonder how on earth she made it this far as a guide dog.

If you’d like to learn more about the training of a guide dog, and how a loopy lab can become a gentle guide dog, then click here to read my latest article.